I don’t want to be outside
Knowing you through a peephole
I want you to open the gates
And let me flood in
Know you wholly
I am done
Living life your way
Knowing the parts of you
You wanted me to see
Now either let me see you wholly
Know you wholly
Let full submission be a part of us
Or cover the peephole
And bid me farewell
Because peephole is
Not letting me live
And not letting me leave
So, help me
And choose something
As I always said to you
You have the reigns & chains
It’s time again for you
To choose from options
And get me or forget me
I am just a closed door away
With the smile you like to see
With the heart you like to love
With the words you like to hear
Hopefully with the love you like to have
P.S. : Today’s song is Outside by Staind. One of my favorite π
Beautifully written as always! β€ Loved it! π
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Thanks Khloe π
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No worries Darshith! π
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This is extremely beautifully written. So deep…
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Thanks Pernnille π Glad you found it this way π
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Amazing! Loved it! π
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Thanks Piyush π
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Welcome! Cheers! ππΌππΌ
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That’s really a lovely creation Darshith. The para about the peephole and a how it wouldn’t let you leave or live and then the last line made it all the more awesome.
Also,The song suggestion is great too. I like the music π
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Thank you Hargun π Yes, I love the song & loved writing this poem π Your words always make me smile π
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Glad they do ! π
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π Your photography is going to next level with each passing monday π
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Thank you! I’m glad you think so π
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I love this, it is wonderfully beautiful!
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Thank you friend π
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Oh my god! This is so bloody romantic!
I haven’t heard this song, though π
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Chalo finally π Many new songs coming your way π Idea of peephole came from the video of this song & then the words flew π
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Lovely! Can’t wait π
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I can send you the list before hand also π But in the blogs I am posting only those songs which I am listening that same day and how it influences my writing π Some personal thoughts to see and mark the improvement π
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I would like it with each post β
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Sure! Enjoy π
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Darshith, this is indeed good to read.. But I got few thoughts as I differ from your opinions..
You are the one peeping through the hole and why are you asking the other one to close the peephole?
If you are not comfortable, with where you are, aren’t you the one who should move on? You could knock the door, but you must also leave, when the knock is unanswered.. To save yourself from further pain..
Also aren’t you assuming too much from just what you saw through the peephole..
Now, you can just ignore all above, call it poetic justice and be happy for a beautiful verse.. π π
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Wow! Thanks Aadhirai for asking your heart & I think I didn’t make things clear. I have knocked (in real life) but it’s unanswered. And the view from the peephole is so wonderful and enchanting that I can’t go anywhere else. The person inside has to close the peephole or open the door to end both our struggle π I know the person inside is also not satisfied with the view she’s having from the same peephole (may be and yeah I used a she :D). But no matter what, if the knock is unanswered then the best thing will be to go to somewhere else. Let’s wait & see what the person inside does π May be it’s all a farce and I am looking at a poster used to close the peephole from inside already. Anything is possible. May be no one is inside also. Some serious thoughts can bring so many scenarios in an instant π
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What’s destined to you will reach you no matter what hurdles there are in between.. π
So goes for those not meant to happen.. Even if the path is all rosy and easy, you can’t just touch the finish line..
Patience and life will be beautiful.. π
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Gotcha Girl π Feeling a bot better π
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Glad to know.. π
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Love this. π
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Thanks Rupali π
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Very nice!
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Your appreciation always brings a smile to my face Lynn π
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I am so glad, always love reading!
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Likewise β€
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Beautifully said either surrender to me completely or let me go my away π This in between phase is very injurious for heart π
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Yes Neerja, testing & more confusing π Thank you for understanding. Happy Monday π
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π Happy Monday night π as our day is already over π
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Mera not over π¦ @ 8, it will be over π Feeling sleepy abhi se π
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ha ha π then you must be a late office goer π .. I come early and leave by 6 π .. exactly 8 hours π
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Yeah, I have late timings but it’s 9 hours daily π¦ Everything is late starting from waking up in the morning to sleeping in the night π
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π See this the problem π Early to bed ..early to rise ..early off from office too π this can work on till you are bachelor but once married π you will know the consequences π
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Haan π¦ abhi se realize mat karao ye sab π After marriage, things will not only change but things will be new π More confusion π Early to bed but no sleep due to internet & books & series & football π
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ha ha …that’s called height of optimism π I like it π
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Thank you Madam π Nautanki me sabse aage π
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:p look who is talking :p
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I was talking about myself only π You thought, I was talking about you? π same mentality na? π
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He he π you wrote it that way :p
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But I meant it in a different way π We both are nautankis then π
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Ha ha …dat will work π chalo need to make dinner bye π
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Ok π swadist bhojan ban gaya? π
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Ha bana ke kha bi liya :p …anyways happy Tuesday π
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Shabash π Happy Tuesday π
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π Thank you π
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Longing for weekend as always π
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Same here π
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You too? Wow! High five π
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High five π
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BEAUTIFUL !!!!!’
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Thank you Saloni π
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It’s a beautiful read Darsith π
I have a suggestion: Don’t use more than 15 tags(+categories) for one post. π
Have a great week ahead.
Anand π
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Thank you Anand for the appreciation and suggestion π Will keep that in mind π
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Welcome, and thanks for the consideration π
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Good to come across wonderful people π
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Yes, it’s true. π Thanks!
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You seem like a wonderful guy π
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Best Wishes : )
Anand
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Hey Anand, I checked the post on Moksha shared by you. Have dropped a comment also, Thank you for letting me know about this and all the help π I really appreciate it.
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Welcome my friend. π
It’s my pleasure and thanks for your nice words. I am sure this forum would be a wonderful blogging experience, along with the Writing 101 π Best Wishes π Anand
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Yes Anand, I myself look forward to make some contributions to Writing 101 π Monday can also be good and best, it’s proved π
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Yes, true. Feel free to volunteer in Alumni forum too. You will make many new friends π
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Yes sure π Thanks again π
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Welcome, Darshith. π
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